I have completed the first draft of chapter 4 after a long moment.
But can someone tell me what the point of having an outline is for if the characters refuse to listen to it? This was supposed to be like super slow burn and these two idiots won't stop flirting.
Like control yourselves. You haven't even admitted to yourself that you like this guy and you already want to kiss him. Slow down, it's only chapter 4.
I worked very hard on my outline Daniel Fenton and I will not have meddling ghosts ruin it.
My sister came up with this comedy gold. @starswhisperwritershear thank you for your service.
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The best comedy bit I've ever seen in a show (from a personal perspective) is in fact, Mr. Lancer swearing in classical literature titles. It's always so perfect for the situation and makes me cackle every time. Whoever thought of that deserves an award.
Y'all, i forgot to grab my computer on the way to work today and now I can't work on the chapter. Which sucks cause work has been unbelievablely slow and I would have been able to get a good chunk of it done. 😮💨
Chat is 7,000 words too much for a first chapter? Asking for a friend
guys I'm starting to really like dandash I'm actually so cooked
Yall were not quick with this one so I yapped at a friend for three hours and he gave me something better
Quick,
I need a non awkward way to tell your mom that your best friend has moved into boyfriend status.
the fact that dash has a dog called pookie has aged like FINE WINE
Alright grammarly this is the final straw. Do you even know what context is? Or how different words have different connotations to them? You're correcting a language that uses nothing but subtext and connotation and tone and you can't even figure it out?
This one is for grammarly.
I see you.
I see you after all you've done to me.
You come in, sweep me off my feet, correct my comma usage and wrap me around your little finger making me dependent on you.
You taunt me with your premium features, making me wish I had just a little more money to fully commit to you and you never go on any good sale.
Then you drop me into a filthy hole with the rest of the garbage by incorporating ai that can't tell the difference between its and it's and leave me to rot.
So I move on, I find something better than you could ever be. Just for you to flash a 50% off sale in my face like we were nothing. Like I never meant a goddamn thing to you.
Now you want me back?!?!
After all this, this how you want to wine and dine me back into your arms?
Well, I won't play your game. I've grieved our parting already and now I feel nothing but utter indifference toward you.
@any-n-everything Here's why i think Sam and Tucker needed some more thorough development. I mean it's not that they were terrible, and I think the majority of my problems with them suffer from the writing and it being a kids show who's primary goal was to teach kids moral lessons. But Sam had several moments where she disregard what Danny wanted and pushed her own agendas no matter how that affected him and Tucker. Such as the gorilla project (yes it was for Danny's grade but the poor kid got no sleep that night and clearly didn't want to be there), or the one that gets me the most is season 2 episode 1 when she wished Danny and her had never met and then instead of trying to solve the problem in any other way (she already knew at this point that it was the wishing ghost attacking) Like going to get help from any of the other ghost hunter or dealing with the ghost herself which she was shown very capable of doing (and we needed more of because honestly that was a cool aspect of her character) she decided to put her friend, who she supposedly cares about, through the most traumatic experience of his life a second time. She killed him, twice. Because she was the one who egged him on to go in the portal the first time despite him warning her about safety issues, and then she just shoved him in the second time. But then the show wants to convince me she likes him romantically. That's crazy. Not to mention the one time with the trucks that Danny and Tucker liked and she wanted him to use his ghost powers to her advantage despite having in several other episodes berated him for doing the same thing. And (last example I promise) in the show finale when he gave up his ghost powers to protect his family and go back to a normal life because he's been struggling with this for so long, she gets upset! (They all do, I'm not excluding Jazz and Tucker from this, this is just my Sam paragraph). She tells him that she feels she lost a friend and that he's wrong to give up superpowers because now he's not unique or special and she wants friends who are unique and special. Like damn, Sam. Low blow. It's like when a friend only wants to hang out with you to play on your x box and when you don't have the x box they disappear and hate you.
As for Tucker, he's not quite as bad and again I think his character just suffers from the Tv-Y7 rating, but there are a few times where he just straight up disrespects Danny. The only two times we're shown that they get in a fight, Tucker completely does a 180 and makes Danny out to be the bad guy. In the episode where he wishes he has ghost powers he just blames Danny for taking the spotlight and showing off how much better he is, when Danny never did any of that (at that point in the show). Even if Tucker felt that way because of jealousy, he was still really rude with how he spoke to Danny and quite literally put a citizen's life in danger just to upstage Danny. He does it again in the one for where he runs against Dash for class president. (I know that in both of these he was under a ghost influence, but all of the problems started before the ghosts got involved, they just enhanced what he was already feeling.) (And I know Danny and Sam weren't listening to him but that's wildly out of character for Danny and I feel the writers just conformed his personality to the plot to teach the listen to your friends narrative) but he also took that scepter willingly from the mummy ghost. He has like a weird superiority complex that he takes out on people at the most random times. Then in the episode with Nocturne, his best dream is him being all rich and making Danny his janitor! That's not how you think of your best friend! That shows just how much better he thinks he is compared to Danny. Then in the episode where the G.I.W. buys Danny's house and Danny is freaking out, Tucker is like hey man, you have a lot of money now, act like it and enjoy it and calm down. Then gets mad at him when he acts like it and enjoys it! And also he did the same thing as Sam in the finale.
Sorry for the chaotic jumbled mess of thoughts, I have more to say I just can't remember any more specific examples off the top of my head at the moment. But again, he could have worse, I just think they also deserve their own growing and learning moments.
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